Place Name: First Place Contestant Name: Royal Purple Entry Title: Heart health ‘critical’ for student-athletes Entry Credit: Zoe Emerson Judge Comment: Good story with good local examples.Story flowed nicely with good transitions. Liked that you found personal example on your campus. The 2nd paragraph is your lede!!
Place Name: Second Place Contestant Name: The Advance-Titan Entry Title: Fox Valley prepares for cases of measels Entry Credit: Jacob Link Judge Comment: Good lede, which is important to this judge. Good information to share. Easy to read. Don’t forget your audience— story would have been enhanced a bit with more input from students about vaccination status/beliefs..
Place Name: Third Place Contestant Name: The Clarion Entry Title: Studying epilepsy to help at home Entry Credit: Kelly Feng Judge Comment: Good story and one of few that dealt with the life of a student. It’s good work, but don’t be afraid to self-edit to tighten it up. Work on ledes— something like: Motivated by her brother’s illness, Madison College student Teegawende ‘Josephine’ Segrado is working to find help for those dealing with epilepsy. That way you could have introduced the main story earlier.
Place Name: Honorable Mention Contestant Name: Student Voice Entry Title: Act 15’s impact on UWRF’s HEAL 108 course Entry Credit: Kristy Moore Judge Comment: Good story, with important information to share. I would have liked what you ended with to be more on the front end of the story. Working the 2nd to last paragraphs into the lede, perhaps.
